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Sweet September by ~marvulusmordus:iconmarvulusmordus:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Rhymes




Sweet September
By: Marvin Alexis


Sweet September solitude under sun-stroked skies
shimmers secrets of this supple slit of an existence,
and yet as sweetness slumbers in my eyes
I conjure thoughts that breed reluctance.

Although these secrets sealed with
perpendicularly fingered lips
shall never taste
nor touch
nor kiss
sweetness swallowed whole by snowy bliss,
they'll whisper of just another never,
of whose sweet presence I'll wholly miss.
©2002-2009 ~marvulusmordus
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Author's Comments

Where does it snow in September? Not New York at least. Last year, well this year, it only snowed on my birthday. Made me feel all special n shit.

Well, let's give it up for a guy in love/lust who lacks the nadz to do something about it.

That pic was taken quite a while ago, possibly in 2001, me at my HS lunch table, looking oh so alone in the company of his Iced tea, and lunch buddies, who you can't see. Would you believe I'm the cameraman?
Didn't think so, a friend, Marc, was testing out his digital cam. That blur effect is innate. Cool, huh....?

Daily Deviation

Given 2002-10-25

"Sweet September solitude under sun-stroked skies” begins and excellent work. Sweet September by marvulusmordus is remarkable in it’s scope and depth of passion. Classic writing. [picked by faithwalker] (Selected by +skyorange) (Featured by `skyOrange)

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~imani Oct 12, 2002, 8:56:28 PM
interesting.

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"We are not human beings on a spiritual journey...We are Spiritual Beings on a human journey..."
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~weapon-g Oct 12, 2002, 9:15:02 PM
Yo! That's me!!! On the right, lookin thru my bag! Ha ha. Man those days at tech seem such a long time ago, but I glad I'm outta that prison. Yo awesome poem, "Although these secrets sealed with perpendicularly fingered lips". Niceness.
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`utro Oct 13, 2002, 5:12:19 PM
This is really beautiful. Excellent use of alliteration throughout. And just the overall mood is a sort of tender melancholy. Very nice writing.

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~goldenchylde Oct 14, 2002, 7:35:22 AM
BeeeKlyn Tech

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~nene-chan Oct 14, 2002, 9:38:07 AM
This is wonderful. Truly.
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`nonculture Oct 15, 2002, 2:12:45 PM
As Utro said, damn good use of alliteration. I really like this, and the subject matter is difficult to tackle in a fresh way, but you managed it.

I'm gonna have to go see what else you have here.

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`pantopicon Oct 15, 2002, 11:59:37 PM
Beautiful work. There's an incredible oral quality to this piece, it demands to be read aloud and to be savoured. Extraordinarily evocative piece, very rich in tone and nostalgic.

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I always dream of a pen that would be a syringe.
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!medusa Oct 19, 2002, 3:41:31 PM
piognant, nice rhyme scheme. it works

peace
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~eagle81 Oct 26, 2002, 3:12:53 AM
good stuff

lol sophisticated comment aye?
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